Welcome to WIP IT UP! In this scene from our work in progress, “Barely Survived”, we catch another glimpse of one who is watching Jackie and Daniel. Remember, underneath all the spankings, voyeurism, sex and romance ... lies a murder mystery. :) Take a peek!
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Through angry eyes, he stared out of his
apartment window and focused on the light blue Mustang. He shouldn’t have gotten so close to
her. Sitting down on the sofa, he opened his
laptop and clicked on the security icon.
Some time ago, he had an associate install a camera outside the luxurious
beach home which gave him a bird’s eye view of Daniel’s comings and goings.
The explosion of the Bonerati’s boat had
him constantly looking over his shoulder.
In the beginning he wasn’t too concerned, since it had been deemed an
accident. But then Detective Michael
Andrews showed up on the scene and revived the cold case. At first it seemed comical. The bumbling detective appeared at the oddest
places and times, and it was always just one more thing with him. Unfortunately, what he had concluded as
ineffectual detective work turned out to be a methodical process of elimination. Underestimating this man was a mistake that
should never happen again.
Another spoke in the wheel was Daniel’s
sister in law. He never expected Jackie
to resurface, and her presence was throwing a curve into his plan. She’d been summoned back to the island for
questioning and they’d become inseparable.
Having Jackie around wasn't necessarily a bad thing. In fact, he felt sure there was a way to use
her to his advantage.
He stared at the computer screen
clutching his stomach; the antacid he took was worthless. Today he’d been reckless and
shortsighted. Following Jackie certainly
upset her and aroused suspicion that something was awry. He probably shouldn’t have done that. Yet, it was possible that misdirection could
lead to his ultimate success and, hopefully, his ill-advised act served some
purpose after all.
He tapped his fingers on the refrigerator
door, opened it and pulled out a beer. After twisting the cap off, he took a long swig and sat back down to ponder
the situation. As he slowly raised his head, a maniacal smile appeared. Jackie and Daniel's new relationship just might be what he needed to end this mess once
and for all. He put his beer down,
pulled out a cell phone and hit the speed dial.
“I need you to do something for me.” His voice was steady and confident.
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That’s it for today. Thanks to Melody for keeping this kick-ass
hop alive and well. Of course, I always
appreciate your visit and LOVE your comments! Now please continue hopping and reading. Have a great week! ~ shelly
Ohhh.... this is getting SO good. Last week we were left wondering who the voyeurs were and now we have an unknown man who I can only presume is the killer. I am sure he has ill contempt for Jackie throwing him a curve by hooking up with Daniel. But his thoughts about working Jackie into his plans. Oh, that just irks me and I hate this man already. I hope Daniel kicks his ass.
ReplyDeleteAwesome tension building, Shelly. ☺ Hoping you had a wonderful Thanksgiving ☺
Thanksgiving was a lot of fun here ... hope you enjoyed it, too! I'm so glad you like this! It was an earlier snippet when he only had an outside view, but from now on will become a voyeur on the inside. Jackie is rarely being punished or having sex with Daniel from now on without someone watching. Of course, the fun is in the mystery of who they are. :)
DeleteWhere were the inner voices this week? Really missed them. :)
Very intriguing. Insight to the mind of the bad guy. Always love that!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Helen! I always found the bad guy's POV in the police dramas to be fascinating! Not as in depth here, but still fun to write :)
DeleteEXPLOSIONS, death, murder... oooh I love me a story with plenty of intrigue. I'm with Melody, this unknown has to be the killer. C'mon Daniel... figure out this mess and nail 'im. ~grin~ I love hopping over here :D
ReplyDeleteLOL! Doug and I just put our final two cents in to help Daniel and the detective unravel this damn case! God knows, they weren't doing it on their own! ;) Don't you hate when you give your main characters a job and they shirk their duties? HA!
DeleteI'm so glad you enjoy hopping over here, Christina! I always look forward to your comments! :)
Interesting excerpt. I can't wait to find out what his plan is. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Jennifer! I think it will be fun to watch this unfold ... :)
Deleteoh you are a tease :D this is really getting interesting!
ReplyDeleteI LOVE being a tease, Joelle! Thanks so much - I'm glad you liked! :)
DeleteSo intrigued! You've got to update us when this is out.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Tara! We've been plastering plot holes and writing the last chapter at the same time. Hopefully this will get to the publisher before Christmas. I'll definitely keep everyone posted. :)
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